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you told me once that a strike of lightning
is five times hotter than the surface of the sun.

and so if i am the sky
then you are the storm,
flawlessly constructed and
elaborately designed to strike me
when i'm broken.

except lightning never strikes
the same place twice,
and your fist has struck
the flesh above my cheekbone
more times than i can count.

---

"the earth is number two,
and heaven is number three,"
you told me once, as you slipped
your hand beneath my skirt.
your other hand was on the wheel,
guiding us through the storm.

"—because the earth was created first,"
you would tell me,
although i didn't want
to believe it.
"heaven was just an afterthought."

your hand was warm,
and your touch was electric.
i did nothing as you caressed
my inner thigh, and i stood still
as you reached for more.
i allowed you.
i had no choice.

the rain fell on the windshield
like a map of confused roads
leading nowhere,
and i thought quietly to myself
as our silence burned the bridges.

you never told me number one,
and you thought i didn't know.
but i did.

i did.

--

you are the thunderstorms on venus
and the hurricanes on jupiter
that last for hundreds of years.

you are the storm that makes
the monks ring their bells
and the aztecs mourn
and the people run from Sullivan.

you are the lightning on saturn,
and you will never
leave the clouds.

---

hell is number one.
earth is number two.
heaven is number three.

hell was created before
there was even an earth,
and earth was created
before there was even a heaven,
and it's okay.

because we can still
be dreamers.

and we can tell ourselves
that heaven was created for
the earth,
and i can pretend to still believe
that a pearl is created
every time lightning strikes an ocean
(like i did when i was little)
and you can pretend to be
the promise after the storm.

you can pretend to love me,
and it's okay.

---

you told me once that a single hurricane
has more power than an atomic bomb.

and so if i am the earth
then you are the bomb,
imperfectly constructed and
elaborately designed to strike me
when i'm broken.

only this time,
bombs strike everything.
even you.

and so if i am the earth
and you are the bomb,
then this time we will die together.

except nature is immortal,
and i will have a thousand years
to correct myself.

you are mortal,
and you will only have a lifetime
to fix you.

---

so when the summer storms come
and Indra saunters forward
with a bolt in his hand
and rage in his eye
and flakes of fire rip through the sky,
i will be there.
because i am not scared
of lightning
or thunder
or you.

and while the aztecs cry
and Sullivan runs for cover
and the monks turn to their bells,
i will turn to the earth.

i will travel to the tropics
and climb the tallest tree on the
highest mountain, with
lightning rods in my hands
and magnets in my pockets
and scream.

I wrote this a few weeks ago, and I kept thinking to myself that I should upload this at the right time. But I don't know when the right time is, and I'm sick of waiting. I even contemplated posting this at 12:00 midnight.

________________

Things I learned while writing this poem:

1.) lightning often strikes the same place twice.
2.) the odds of being struck by lightning is 1 in 1,107,143, and yet Roy Sullivan was a man who was struck by lightning 8 times.
3.) Venus has thunderstorms; Saturn has lightning.
4.) there is currently a hurricane on Jupiter, and it has lasted for more than 300 years.
5.) the monks used to ring their bells when the storms came, thinking it would fend off the evil spirits.
6.) aztecs believed a person died every time lightning struck.
7.) there is such a thing as ball lightning.
8.) the greeks used to believe a pearl was created every time lightning struck the ocean.
9.) a single hurricane has more power than 10 atomic bombs.
10.) lightning and thunderstorms are more common in the tropics.

________________
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Given 2014-03-15
the science of us. by TheAstrologist ( Suggested by DailyBreadCafe and Featured by inknalcohol )
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FunkForTheFunky Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2014
The amount of research going into writing something is not nearly important as how it is applied. What a creative and incredible piece of work. I will definitely have to watch you for this! Thanks for sharing.
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2014
Wow, thank you so much! :) I'm glad you liked it, and thank you for the sweet comment... it means a lot to me :heart:
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British-Prophetess Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I have to say this is very thought provoking and quite imaginative as well. There are plenty of references ranging from science and mythology/history and that is what makes it all the more interesting in terms of imagery and metaphors. Very well done! :D
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014
Thank you so much for the sweet comment. :hug: And yes, I'm a huge fan of everything historical & mythological... it's pretty much the foundation for most of my work, so I'm glad you liked the references! :)

I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. :tighthug: It means a lot to me. :heart:
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Babou-Shka Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2014
Very well written, quite powerful.
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014
Thank you so much, it means a lot to me. :aww:

I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment! :heart: It means the world. :earth:
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Babou-Shka Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014
You're very welcome :hug:
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner May 26, 2014
:aww:
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al-iskander Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This poen is solid. Seems to be a real feeling from a real experience.
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014
Thank you for taking the time to read. :heart: The story has a basis in fact, but the experience is not my own. I really appreciate your comment... it means the world to me. :earth: And thanks for the fav! :hug: :D

I'm glad you liked it. (: :tighthug:
-Elizabeth
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al-iskander Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It's been a pleasure. I believe you can write about anything if your characters are solid and strong. Keep on working. I like it ;D
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2014
Thanks (: :tighthug:
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al-iskander Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You are welcome n.n
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner May 26, 2014
:aww:
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al-iskander Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hug 
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PINK-ROSE14 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Professional Photographer
This is beyond gorgeous. 

I'm stunned...

:heart: :heart: :heart: Please publish a book of poetry.... Pretty please? 
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014
Thank you, you're so sweet! :aww: I'm glad you liked it, it means a lot to me. (: :huggle: And haha maybe I will! :D I'll let you know if I ever do. ;P lol

Thank you for your support. :hug:
-Elizabeth :heart:
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PINK-ROSE14 Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2014  Professional Photographer
: ) You're welcome! (And so are you)! : )
:D Please do! I'm sure you will! 

No problem at all, dear. :D :huggle:

- Erin :heart:
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014
Aww, thank you! :aww: :tighthug:

I'm glad you enjoyed it. (: It means a lot to me. :huggle:
-Elizabeth :heart:
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PINK-ROSE14 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Professional Photographer
: ) you're welcome! ^^ :huggle:

No problem at all! 
-Erin :heart:
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014
:tighthug:
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PINK-ROSE14 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Professional Photographer
:glomp:
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kilkegard Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014
I'm just going to sit here for a little while and try to figure
out where the ton of bricks that just fell on me came from.  :o (Eek)   
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014
Haha :giggle: I'm glad it had a strong impact, that's what I hoped to achieve. :hug: I'm glad I succeeded! :D

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment, it means the world to me. :earth:
-Elizabeth :heart:
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kilkegard Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014
Reading the science of us was a pleasure :D (Big Grin)  .  You succeeded brilliantly. Hug 
Though, I don't think I've fully taken it all in yet.  Its like eating rich food,
too much at once and you have a stomach ache (or in this case heart ache).
I'm bookmarking this page so I can come back and read it again (and again and again Wink/Razz ).

Oh, and its very cool you seem to know my new friend AuthorKatieOlson.
She's been awesome at helping me and giving me encouragement :) (Smile) .  Very cool!
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014
Aww, thanks! :aww: I'm happy to hear that you're bookmarking my poem, I'm glad you liked it so much. :huggle:

And yes, I know her very well. :D She's one of my closest friends on dA. She was also one of my first watchers... she supported me from the very beginning. :huggle: :heart:

I'm glad you found pleasure in reading it... it means a lot to me. :hug:
-Elizabeth
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ianmsquee Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014
Wow... This is amazing! Love how the strength builds towards the end... :iconthumbsupplz::icongrin--plz:
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014
Thank you for the sweet comment! :aww: I really appreciate it; I'm glad you liked it. ;P

Thank you for your support, it means the world to me. :)
-Elizabeth :heart: :huggle:
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ianmsquee Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014
Awww! :icontinoplz: you're very welcome for the comment & support! :hug:<3
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014
:aww:
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ianmsquee Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014
:iconspinplz:
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PhoenixFlamesRising Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014
Wow. This so powerful, and so well-written. Tough subject to write about, but I hope writing it was cathartic to some degree; and I suspect that reading it has been cathartic to others. There is power in words, and in this poem -- "more power than 10 atomic bombs."
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014
Thank you so much! I'm really glad you enjoyed it, it means a lot to me. :) And I see you took the time to read the little list I put in there, huh? ;P Lol I really appreciate it, means the world. :earth:
-Elizabeth :)
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PhoenixFlamesRising Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014
I just re-read it again, and it gets even better with a second read. It's just SO well-written; the way it flows from one paragraph to the other, using different themes to embellish upon certain points in such a poetic way. I remain TRULY impressed with this one!   :)
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014
Aww. :aww: Thank you, you're so sweet. :huggle: I'm so glad you liked it! I'm always happy when my poems have such an impact on people, so the fact that you took the time to read it twice truly means the world! Thank you so much for the support, it really means a lot to me. :) And I'm glad you're impressed! :D

-Elizabeth
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PhoenixFlamesRising Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014
Very impressed, with your poetic talent, and with your humbleness and generosity! w00t!  
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014
:aww: You're too sweet. :) Thank you so much. :D

-Elizabeth
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ZanderKahdoma Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Student Photographer
I really love this poem, you did a fantastic job writing it :D
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014
Aww, thank you! :D I really appreciate it. :hug: :cuddle:
-Elizabeth :heart:
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ZanderKahdoma Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014  Student Photographer
You're welcome :iconlove:
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014
:heart:
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jeanclaire Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014   General Artist
i just fell in love with your words. such sorrow. such beauty. so many memories... Waaaah!  thank you Xx
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014
Thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it. :) And 'so many memories'? I hope you've never been through anything like this. :(

Thank you so much for your support! :hug: It means a lot to me. :cuddle:
-Elizabeth :heart:
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brlars Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014  Student Photographer
Powerful stuff! Loved the science behind it!
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2014
Aw thanks, I'm glad you like it. :) :heart: It means a lot. :D :huggle:
-Elizabeth :cuddle: :hug:
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LeTheTan Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
I like sentense : "if i am the sky
then you are the storm"Heart Heart Heart 
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014
Aw, thanks. :D :hug: I'm glad you liked it. :)
-Elizabeth :heart:
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LeTheTan Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
no problem :))
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014
:heart:
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LeTheTan Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
afterwards, you should share your poems for me. I like it :) ( how to I share my post for you? ) :squee: 
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