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there was a boy i once knew.

He used to teach me about the universe—
how planets are actually small atoms that
make up galaxies, and how the stars we see
are really just particles that make up infinity.
He taught me the forgotten history behind the stars,
and how they were so much more
than just flaming orbs of gas.

"The stars were once worlds,"
he would tell me.
"They once were planets,
and now that's all they have left to be."


---

there was a boy i once knew,

and he used to teach me about Fiddler's Green
and Spaceship Earth. He told me what to say
to a person who's dying, and why astrologists
are the people to go to when you can't find your way.

"The astrologists were once mages,"
he would tell me, his wings
itching to be free.
"They once were lovers,
and now that's all they have left to be."


---

He used to talk for hours about what
he imagined it felt like to be reincarnated,
and why you feel most alive when you're
almost dead. He used to scream about how
painful it was to have cancer, and used to cry
about how much more excruciating it was to say goodbye
to the only person
you ever loved.

There was a boy I once knew,
and I used to sit beside his
metallic bed
waiting for him
to wake up.

"Life was once a miracle."
he would tell me,
blue veins bursting
through his angelic skin.
"I once was a warrior,
and now that's all I have left to be."


---

there was a boy i once knew,

and he used to tell me
how much he loved me.

"I will see you again one day,"
he would say, with his
eyes wide open and wet.

"Maybe in heaven,
maybe in hell,
maybe in Fiddler's Green."


---

He was a mage
and a warrior
and an astrologist.

He was a soldier,
a lover,
a victim of cancer.

---

Adam was a boy I once knew
and one day I will see him again.
not in heaven
not in hell
not in Fiddler's Green.

I will meet him where the moon meets
the ocean, and where dreams will put their arms
around the children we would've had
as we sit across from each other and give thanks
at the kitchen table.

I will see him in another life,
in another million years
after we have been reincarnated
a thousand times, and after a thousand
lifetimes when our paths will
happen to cross again.

I will see him where the stars become worlds,
and the astrologists become mages,
and where lives will be miracles.

I will see him again one day,
and that is all that I ask.

---

Adam was a boy I once loved,
and now that's all he has left to be.

thank you to those of you who actually took the time to read this. :)

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original title: fiddler's green

fiddler's green: a legendary supposed afterlife, where there is perpetual mirth, a fiddle that never stops playing, and dancers who never tire.

____________________________

—and so when man and horse go down
Beneath a saber keen,
Or in a roaring charge of fierce melee
You stop a bullet clean,
And the hostiles come to get your scalp,
Just empty your canteen,
And put your pistol to your head
And go to Fiddlers' Green.

-unknown

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19andMugsy Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
wow, you have a beautiful way with words, you're an amazing story teller :)
You're an inspiration! Poet, keep up the great writing!    
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014
Aww, thank you so much! :) I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment, it means a lot to me :huggle:
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19andMugsy Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome! 
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Anka-aram Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014
This is a wonderful poem -so touching and well written.
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014
Thank you so much, I really appreciate it! :)
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PINK-ROSE14 Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Professional Photographer
This is exquisite! Beautiful imagery and I also really love the line breaks and the italics. 
Never stop writing. I'm sure you'll be published someday soon. (If not already).

-Goes and writes poetry because now I'm inspired.-  

--

Heartbreaking, beautiful, but you did a very good job. Beautifully executed. 

- Erin 
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014
Thank you so much! :heart: This is actually my favorite work (even if it is the least popular ^^;) and I'm very proud of it. :) Took me forever to write, haha :faint:

This poem is actually inspired by a real boy. His name was Jason, and he died from neuroblastoma (cancer) when he was ten. I was inspired to write this when his mother was talking one day about how he had made so many plans for his life. He wanted to become a scientist and get married... he had names picked out for his children. His mother was devastated, she was crying for weeks. Every time I read this poem in particular I get such a heavy feeling in my chest... 

Thank you so much for taking the time to read it! It means a lot to me. All these poems have a special meaning behind them, so when somebody takes the time to comment it just makes me so happy. :huggle:

I really do appreciate it. :heart:
-Elizabeth
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PINK-ROSE14 Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Professional Photographer
You're welcome! :heart: I can see why. : ) And it doesn't matter if it's the least popular, it's still beautiful. 

Oh gosh, that's incredibly sad. I had a hunch (who ever uses the word hunch, I read way too many Nancy Drew Mysteries when I was younger...) that the poem was inspired by a real life experience. That's horrible. If I was a mother I would be incredibly sad and crying or weeks as well. 

You're welcome. : ) 
That's the best way to write poetry. I admire you for that. 
The majority of my poems were inspired by portraits that I found on DA. I almost never write without a photo to inspire me. That's because I'm afraid the poems will turn out too depressing and emotional. 

:D No problem. :heart:
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
Thank you. :happycry:

And yeah, it is. :( I feel so bad for the mother.

And same here, I'm exactly the same. If you'd look at my favorites, those are all artworks that give me inspiration on my writing.... I can't write without a photo or story, as well.

But yeah, I'm so glad you enjoyed it. :) It means a lot to me. :hug:

-Elizabeth :heart:
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PINK-ROSE14 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Professional Photographer
You're welcome. : )

Oh yeah, nothing can compare to the grief of loosing a child. When I was nine a four year old got hit by a car on my street. She died. Her mother had finally let her go play with her older brother (who was seven) in the street. Her mother was watching them, but she got a phone call in the house. A car came and the brother wasn't paying attention... 
Her name was Dorthy. 

What are we, twins? 
Yes, I really cannot write without a good photograph. And if I try, it comes out as complete shit. Though, I firmly believe that as a writer, you will always have your shit days. You just have to write through it and eventually you'll hit something good. : ) My high school English teacher taught us that. 

You're welcome, again. ^^ :huggle:

-Erin :heart: 
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
Oh, poor girl... that's just absolutely terrible. :( And I also can't help but think about the terrible guilt that must put on the mother and brother. That's so tragic...

And yeah, I can relate. My teachers don't really give me any good advice on writing, unfortunately (I'm a freshman). They're pretty apathetic towards the subject. :/ I'm entirely self-taught... I started writing about two months ago though, so I still have a long way to go.
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PINK-ROSE14 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Professional Photographer
I know. I was sad about it for a long time. Oh yes! The guilt that is left over in people after something that tragic happens! It's terrible. :(

A Freshman in high school? I hope you are able to take some creative writing classes in the near future. You would absolutely flourish! 
I was able to take two creative writing classes in high school. (I'm a freshman in college). (I feel so old)! 

Oh, I'm entirely self-taught as well. :D 
Holy crap. O.O wat. Only two months ago!! I thought you had been writing for at least two years!
I've been writing since i was 14. I'm 20 now. : ) 

So do I. ^^ You're doing splendidly! 
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014
Yes, high school... although some say I look a bit older, haha. ^^; I never really saw it, though.

And yes, two months... I've been struggling with an inferiority complex for quite a while, so I never really wrote before then. Growing up I was always scared to write, so I pretty much failed all my essays. :hmm:

Aw, thanks. You're doing great, as well. :aww: And by your profile picture I actually thought you were younger. :o

Yay, we're both self-taught! High five! :highfive: :giggle:
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shadytales Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Student Writer
what an amazing poem, really enjoyed reading it
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014
Thanks. :) I really appreciate it. :hug:
-Elizabeth
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Sherjaxon Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
On honey, pooh on the perfect poem format, this went way beyond that....wonderful words, enchanting yet sad....bravo!!!
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2014
Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it. :)
-Elizabeth :heart:
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ZanderKahdoma Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Student Photographer
This brought me to tears, I love it
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014
I'm glad you like it. :) Even though this poem has the least views, it probably has to be my favorite. :D

I'm glad you enjoyed, and I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. :cuddle: It means the world! :earth:
-Elizabeth :cuddle: :heart:
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ZanderKahdoma Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014  Student Photographer
You are very welcome :D
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2014
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SailorMeowMeow Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
Omg this was beautiful. Im crying
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2014
Aww, I'm happy you liked it... and yes, it's a really sad poem. :( I'm sorry it made you cry. :hug:

Thank you for the sweet words, I really appreciate your support. :huggle:
-Eizabeth :heart: :cuddle:
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MaraAnnelisa Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're really good at writing, you know. This really touched me.

I lost my 11-year old brother to cancer in October last year, and this poem makes me think of him so much. He was always interested in the stars and the galaxy, you could see him living up when he started to talk about that kind of stuff. I wish he'd still be here, we'd probably read the poem together, and talk about how happy he'd be to be clean. But it just couldn't be like that, sadly.
So that's why I hope I'll see him in the "afterlife", or when we both get reincarnated (I actually do believe in those kinda things). It doesn't really matter, I just want to see him again someday.

Anyway, I just wanted to say it's beautifully done! <3
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014
I'm glad you liked it, and I'm so sorry to hear about your brother. :( I've never been through that situation before, so I have no idea how terrible it feels to lose someone that close to you. And, yes, I'm sure you will see him again. :)

Thank you so much for your kind words, and once again I'm so sorry about your brother. :(

I really appreciate your support :hug:
-Elizabeth :heart: :cuddle:
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G-A-AnimeFan4 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I am at a loss of words for this, it's simply beautiful.
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014
Thank you so much! Even though this one has the least comments and favorites, it probably has to be my favorite. I really put my heart and soul into this one. It's actually dedicated to a little boy named Jason who died when he was very young (his struggle with neuroblastoma inspired by to write a cancer story)... and I can't even read the poem out loud without choking up. Every time I read it I just think of his mom... she was crying so much. He was seven years old, and he just wanted to live so badly.

Thank you so much for your support, I really appreciate it. :heart:
-Elizabeth :hug:
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G-A-AnimeFan4 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It's a shame this has the least comments, because it's absolutely amazing.
And I love how you have such reasons to write. That's a very sad story...and it was amazing for you to write this and dedicate it to him...

You're very welcome^^
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014
I appreciate all your support. :heart: It truly means the world to me. :earth:

You guys are the best. (:
-Elizabeth :huggle:
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Timberheart Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014
:iconwhaplz: this is great!!
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2014
Thank you so much! :heart: I worked really hard on it, I'm glad you liked it. :D
(love that emoticon btw) :P

Thank you so much for your support! :hug: It means the world. :earth:
-Elizabeth :cuddle: :heart:
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Timberheart Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014
:D np, Its a great work and deserves to be seen!
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014
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sciencevsart Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Lovely, lovely, depressing, beautiful poem. One can almost see the sky and stars behind the eyelids when reading it out loud.
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2014
Thank you so much! I really appreciate it. :) It means the world. :earth:
-Elizabeth :heart:
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You always tell such a story, and I love that about your poems.
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014
Thank you so much... it means a lot. :D :tighthug: I really appreciate your feedback. :)
-Elizabeth :cuddle: :heart:
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haphazardmelody Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
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ArthurCrow Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014  Professional Writer
Beautifully written Elizabeth.. so much depth and intrigue.
The title pulled me in and I swept away by your cosmic odyssey.

Well scribed, and good formatting.
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014
Thank you so much. :huggle: It means a lot. :heart:

I'm glad you liked it! :hug:
-Elizabeth :cuddle:
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ArthurCrow Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014  Professional Writer
Adored it endlessly :heart:
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014
Haha thanks :D :cuddle:
-Elizabeth :heart:
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LeTheTan Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
so sad :(( . I feel you love him so much.... " boy" really?
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014
Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it. :) And the boy is fictional.... but he's inspired by the struggle of a real boy who died of cancer. :(

Thank you for your support. :)
-Elizabeth :heart: :cuddle:
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LeTheTan Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
not at all :"> nice job! I'm impressed! but frankly speaking, you are great.believe me! :)
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2014
Haha thank you. :D It means a lot. :)
-Elizabeth :heart: :cuddle:
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HONEYjuices Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
SAD & BEAUTiFUL POEM!!
It touched me Really Sad 

I luv Astronomy Heart it'z my religion LOL
I luv our star tha Sun & our Milky Way galaxy:GalacticFap: 

herez a lil Cosmic poem I wrote 4u ;)

MY WORKZ
CONTAIN SECRETZ
LIKE A STARZ SPECTRUM
I'VE LEARNED 2 TAKE
LIFE'S BEATINGS LIKE A DRUM
SO I ABSORB & FUSE HATE
IN2 LOVE LIKE THE SUN
I LOOK
& C MACRO ORGANISMZ STARING
HARDER THEN GRANIT
MY SUNLIGHT HAS VANISHED
& NOW I FEEL
LIKE A WANDERING SCORCHED PLANET
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014
I'm glad you liked it, it means a lot. :D

And it's beautiful! :love: I loved it, thank you so much! :cuddle: Nobody's ever written a poem for me before. :D

I really appreciate it, you're awesome. :iconheartglompplz:
-Elizabeth :heart: :huggle:
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HONEYjuices Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Heart THX
im glad u liked it I think I've fainted. 
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014
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