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she was a girl.

she ran with the moon,
chased fireflies in the bluegrass, and
watched the reflection of sunsets in rain puddles.


                        her name was Alice,
                        and she was a girl.


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but to the dragonflies she was a queen,
and to the mirror she was a sister.
the moon was her prince, and the
blinking windows were the eyes
that kept her safe.

she spent her nights making wishes, and she
dragged her fingers along the shooting stars
that were tangled with her vertebrae.


                        her name was Alice,
                        and she was a girl.


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her body was a river
her mind was an ocean
and her heart was the sky.

she lived in a world where
doves flew in the sea and
whales swam in the moonlight,
and in a universe where
raindrops fell like bombs
and stars fell like gumdrops.

her body was a shadow
her mind was a fire
and her heart was a star—

she was a super nova, and
nothing could hold her back.


                        her name was Alice,
                        and she was a girl.


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"if you see the Water-Bearer
drift from the Sea,
then you will die in the ocean."

"if you see Little Horse
shine as bright as the sun,
you will die by the hand
of Poseidon's trident."


--

Alice believed in constellations,
and was convinced that
they could predict the future.

"They say i will die at an age
as old as the mountains—
with stardust on my eyelids,
a world in my hands,
and heaven on my mind."


but even in the vastness of the constellations
there was not a single star that could predict
death by a woven rope
and a kitchen knife.


                        her name was Alice,
                        and she was a girl.


--

maybe she read the stars the wrong way
or maybe there were too many clouds in the sky,
because now this grey shadow
—once a girl named Alice—
sleeps for eternity at the bottom
of the Eridanus River.

--

she was a girl,

and she died when she was seven
with dirt on her eyelids,
a bloody teddy in her hands,
and her murderer on her mind.


--





                        her name was Alice,
                        and she was a child.

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her name was kristyanna, and she was murdered.
she had an older sister who was with her at the time of the incident, and she is paralyzed for life.

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A special shoutout to my dear friend NotenSMSK for helping me
improve one of the stanzas.


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Tragedy becomes beautiful in daydreams and monsters. by TheAstrologist ( Featured by inknalcohol )
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RogueMudblood Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2015   Writer
Even without this being related to a true story, it is a very powerful piece. You've done a wonderful job incorporating an "Alice in Wonderland" feel to the piece, calling up imagery of hope, fun and joy, even while that repeated phrase foreshadows something terrible coming.

The use of lower case throughout makes it poignant, giving the entire poem a feeling of vulnerability. It forces the reader into a much more childlike mindset, helping to develop a deep empathy with "Alice". Tying her own statement of how she would eventually die to her actual death in the end was brilliantly executed.

I do thank you for sharing this piece, and congrats on the DD feature.
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captivityisevil Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2015
good
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2015
Thanks :heart:
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chainsofinsanity Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Dear.....lord
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2015
Thanks :)
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SpiralVirus Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2015
With much love,


- Forgetful_Panic/Spiral_Virus
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2015
:heart:
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EdithFinch Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Sweet Lord that took an unexpected turn. Beautifully written.
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2015
Thanks you so much, it means a lot to me :heart:
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PrinceoftheAngels Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2015
...sniff... SO POWERFUL... Waaaaaaaah

poor teddy bear though
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2015
Thank you so much for commenting, I'm glad you liked it :heart:
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PrinceoftheAngels Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2015
Your welcome!
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Mlpsweetiepie Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2015  Student Traditional Artist
Any one mine answering me what dose it mean when you get a DD is i t like hard to get in or have a large # of comments plz explain
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Mlpsweetiepie Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2015  Student Traditional Artist
Thank you so much it's been bugging me for awhile
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RogueMudblood Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2015   Writer
You're most welcome. :)
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LeftUnfinished Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
I read and favorited this awhile ago. I'm so glad it finally got a DD!
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2015
Aw thank you so much :heart: That's really sweet :hug:

I'm sorry for the late reply :(
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LindArtz Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2015
Beautiful and deeply disturbing; playing upon a slew of evocative emotions. Congrats on a very well deserved DD!
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2015
Thank you so much for reading :) I really appreciate it :hug:
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IndigoSummerr Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2015  Hobbyist Photographer
Congratulations on the DD :clap:
Have a nice day! :swoon: by PunkyB
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2015
Thanks :) And you too :heart:
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IndigoSummerr Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2015  Hobbyist Photographer
You're most welcome! :aww:
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That1PersonYouForgot Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, what a terrible thing that happened. :( I read the story, that's so evil.

But this poem is great. Well done! :clap: You definitely deserved this DD. :heart:
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2015
I'm really glad you took the time to read the story, as well. That means a lot to me. One of my main motives for writing was to bring recognition to her story... I'm glad I succeeded. :heart:

I appreciate your comment, it means the world to me. :hug: Thank you so much.

I apologize for the late reply!
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That1PersonYouForgot Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
It's alright, and you are most welcome! :huggle: :heart:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :love: by CookiemagiK
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2015
Thank you :) And you too :hug:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure, thank you! Cuddling Practice by TheHugClub
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ervyn23 Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
:happybounce: :happybounce: o my god....thts awesum!!!.....i mean the way you made the fear stand still in the stanzas while instilling hope in the reader....its breath-takingly awesome!!
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2015
Thank you so much :) I'm sorry for replying so late!
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elemental-heiress Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2015  Student General Artist
This kind of... took my breath away. I was so enchanted with the visuals you were placing and the sense of wonder you sewed but I felt that darkness creeping in. Still, I was not expecting what happened in the end. This is how you make a statement <3
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2015
Wow, thank you so much for your comment. :heart: I really appreciate it :hug:

I'm sorry for the late reply!
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19andMugsy Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
WOW there's a lot of amazing ideas, shocking ending, sad in fact but riveting. Great work dearie!!!!  
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2014
Aw, thank you so much :) I really appreciate it :hug: :heart:
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19andMugsy Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're most welcome! :) 
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TahiraKitty Featured By Owner May 13, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Wow!!! I don't really know what else to say....... I feel sad for the little girl tho.
anyway, very creative and nicely written.  Good job!
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner May 16, 2014
Thank you so much, it means a lot to me. :hug: I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment... I'm glad you enjoyed! :) :heart:
-Elizabeth
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MyHeadWonders Featured By Owner May 5, 2014  Hobbyist Interface Designer
Interesting
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner May 5, 2014
In a good way or bad way? Haha :huggle:
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MyHeadWonders Featured By Owner May 8, 2014  Hobbyist Interface Designer
Well it thought i was good until i felt bad about the girl dying 
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner May 26, 2014
:huggle:
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MyHeadWonders Featured By Owner May 27, 2014  Hobbyist Interface Designer
Thanks for the hug cutie!
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner May 27, 2014
Haha no problem :D
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MyHeadWonders Featured By Owner May 28, 2014  Hobbyist Interface Designer
Well thanks your really nice!
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LadyBrookeCelebwen Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is just...it's so sad, and so wonderfully written. It hits hard. Lovely writing!
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner May 3, 2014
Thank you so much for reading, it means a lot to me. :heart: I'm glad you liked it. :huggle:
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LadyBrookeCelebwen Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome! :hug:
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TheAstrologist Featured By Owner May 26, 2014
:aww:
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TheEmptyChest Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014

I love the imagery, how you compare her to the beauty that is all around us. It gives her this almost god-like quality, making her out to be something infinite and indestructible. She was vast and complex, worth more than all the riches in the world, and she was viciously taken. It’s disgusting that we live in a world where children die. There are so many like this girl, so many bright minds snuffed out too soon. The description of the blood teddy bear was particularly poignant. Stolen innocence… so tragic.

The repetition of “her name was Alice, and she was a girl” was brilliant. Every time I read it I kept thinking, She was a human being… with a name… with all the energy and passion of the universe and the dust of stars in her little body. And she was.
  

Stunning poem, dear. Harrowing and all too real, and alive in a way few poems are.  

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